Disclaimer: So I was thinking, what makes for a great rap. Rhyme scheme, delivery, beat, message, but I was forgetting something… Creativity! I had noticed that in some of the most recent raps by my favorite artists such as “IDK” that rappers were utilizing letters, instead of words. If you want to get an idea for what I mean, I suggest you listen to “Trigger Happy”- by IDK. So I decided to do the same thing but using every letter in the alphabet in order. For example instead of writing “see” I’ll write “C”. Every word I manipulated will be shown at the bottom. The story behind this piece is the story of a kid before he went to jail, the “J, K” section symbolizes the switch to him telling us how he got there. I am truly proud of this piece, Enjoy!
P.S I tried to make it kid-friendly :/
Rule: Letters have to be pronounced the same way as when you are singing the alphabet so you can’t use violence for “V” but you can use V- hicle
A-Z
When I’m on my A-game, you don’t wanna “B” the nigga testing me unless you don’t wanna “C” tomorrow
Leave your best friend O’Ding on some sour patch kids filled with sorrow I’m hollow- I ripped my heart out when I witnessed pain and E’vil the whole in my chest see through like a warning sign screaming don’t let my next victim be you
But being heartless has its perks I murder syllables with no F’ort, no sympathy, and no remorse I kill beats just to come back later and revive the corpse
But don’t be intimidated
I’m really an O-G in a 16-year-olds body so think twice before you say “H””I” because I’ll send yo punk ass to the sky and have you know what it’s like to fly
J, k
Jail time is a long unbearable L I’m not willing to take, I’d rather risk my life battling one of the greats Cole, Kendrick, “M”, maybe I made a mistake but I’d rather “N”d a legend than die an “O”ver hyped disgrace
Rhythm, accompanied, poetry or R.A.P has nothing to do with race, money piles or appearance, it has more to do with pace, different styles and lack of adherence, it takes strength to “P”-eel off the vanity but you have it in you but only a select few have the patience to join the “Q” what if I told u vanity can kill you
That’s enough knowledge for one day most people don’t like listening
But I’ll give you an R-rated movie and you won’t stop listening
Invite a sinner to a church and he won’t like visiting
Raise the price of the club, but he won’t stop visiting run outta money and he will start sneaking in
See he’s stuck in a trap but he thinks he’s fine’S’d the system
The time will come when enforcement will catch him, he will struggle, but he can’t rebutle
So he can kiss his white “T” goodbye, while U and I feel sympathy for this guy the “V” hcle is
Speeding away
Another “W” for the cops, and “X” marks the spot where he supposed to rot he thinks to himself Yyyyy
Why would I do that, I wish I could break these four bars like a KIt-Kat, Cookies, sunshine, and Cable I miss that. I should have just stayed in bed and acquired my Z’s
May 3, 2019 at 1:04 am
Dear David,
Wow. Once again you’ve left me speechless. your creative mind is simply unique and quite impeccable. The creative approach you had with this is simply unprecedented in my books. I am beyond proud of you.
For improvement, I would suggest checking over your GUMPS for minor punctuation errors to avoid leaving your readers out of breath.
Regardless, this was a very well done piece my friend. My heart is glad.
With love,
Tolu.
May 11, 2019 at 4:39 am
Dear David,
My guy, you have a way with words and storytelling that I’ve never really experienced before. The way you set up a line is so clever. Rhyming doesn’t seem to be a problem for you because you have the flow. I really enjoyed this piece and am a little upset that I don’t get to hear you rap it. The only suggestion for a fix up I have is that if you’re going to notify the audience of where a letter is being used with quotations, be constant with it. Examples Hi, Jk, and R-rated. Other than that every part of this piece was great. I really hope to read more of your work sir.
You boy,
Oba
June 22, 2019 at 11:43 pm
Dear David,
This was an amazing piece. I am astonished by the way your writing has such a strong message, it’s so powerful. I love how you took something as simple as writing and twisted it into your own unique style with sounds of letters. This piece is so heartbreaking but that’s what makes it beautiful.
For improvements, I would suggest looking over your GUMPS, specifically your periods and commas.
Other than that, I think your piece was very raw and beautiful. Good job!
~ Maira